Pape #3

                                              

                                         The War Gone Unnoticed

The internet has many helpful resources and not just that, comments, advices, and opinions of people can be expressed through it. In some cases it can lead to arguments in disagreement between each other's topic. At the end of the argument, or as you would like to call it conversation, it ends with what you believe. The decision to end a pregnancy is one of those topics where many disagree with each other. Comments such as “it’s my future,” “it’s my body,” or “it’s my decision” put others in a uncomfortable position. Yes, it is your future, your body and your decision. But one thing is for sure, it is a crime. A crime that has not been seen as a crime in the American society. It does not matter how many “buts” and “ifs” are said, abortion continues to be a crime and should be seen as one.

According to New York Times News, 10 states from the United States allow abortion with no restrictions. The other 40 states have different restrictions, such as North Dakota, which carries on the process of abortion before pregnancy reaches 6 weeks. Looking further into the restrictions in states. The states of Iowa, Texas and Virginia have a restriction at 28 weeks of pregnancy; when the baby is fully developed and can feel pain. According to Dr David Robert Grimes a physicist, a baby can start to feel pain at 24 weeks when the nervous system is developed. I guess than under the eyes of those who agree to abortion, it is ok to end a pregnancy? As long as the process takes place before 24 weeks. I disagree. Even if the baby can not feel pain or whatever other reason the abortion should not take place, it is an innocent child. The only blame for this action are the irresponsible parents who did not protect themselves during sexual intercoarse.  

    Why has abortion continued than?  Because they have the right to do so. Some do it for school, financial problems, or for problems at home, but not in the case for one or even more women who take advantage of it, such as Irene Vilar. A woman who has been pregnant 15 times in 17 years  and all of those times she has aborted. This kind of action should not be allowed there are contraceptives in the first place to prevent pregnancies for those who do not wish to have a child.  

Now not everyone is like Irene Vilar, some abort so they can go to college. College gives many opportunities for families to improve, to achieve a dream job, and more. Getting into Universities can be very difficult for some student to be accepted as well. The reasons why she chose to abort are understandable; college takes commitment, effort, money and time.  But there are other things that can be done. There is an Education Amendments of 1972 that can help pregnant students get through college. A leave of absence can be given. Basically the student can get out of college and come back and continue where she stopped. After having the baby child care can be provided through some colleges or even near by locally for help.

Other reasons why families may choose to abort pregnancies are because they can not afford having a baby or would rather choose to wait until they are prepared to take care of the child. The family should know that adoption is an option. There are many women who can’t have children and would love to have one. If it is a financial problem the Government can help through WIC.

Another reason why women choose to abort her pregnancy is because she does not want the baby, and it’s her body; so she can do what she wants to her own body. I agree women should have rights but I believe this case is different. It is not just her body we are speaking about it is about the life of a baby.

    Having an abortion can be a difficult decision for many families. There are many reasons why to agree to abort but we should remember that even if under the law it is ok, even if clinics participate in abortion and even if it is not seen as a crime in our society, we should know that it is a crime and should accept it as it is.  At the end it is your decision, but something has to be done.

Work Cited

Grimes, Dr.David Robert. “A Scientist Weighs Up The Five Anti Abortion Arguments.” The Guardian. The Guardian, 12 August 2015. 3 December 2015.

“Adicta Al Aborto O A Su Marido? Una Mujer Confiesa Que Aborto 15 Veces En 17 Anos.” 20 Minutos. 20 Minutos, 25 October 2009. 3 December 2015.

“Your Pregnancy Week By Week.” BabyCenter. Baby Center.

Dianna. “5 Things Every Pregnant College Student Show Know.” College Success For Moms. TGM Millennials. 14, April 2014. 3 December 2015.

Paper #2 vs Paper #3

 For my experience, composing paper #3 was much more difficult than paper #2 because writing techniques had to be used. So for an example writing in a way to keep your reader interested in it. Also my point had to be much more clear in order to persuade someone and to not lead it to misunderstanding. I also found that the topic I chose for my paper #3 (being against abortion) was difficult because many people agree that abortion is okay and to persuade someone into being anti abortion was difficult without mentioning anything about my own beliefs. Such as religion or it being a crime. Paper number 2 was more straightforward. Which was about the environment.

Maria Ponce

12/1/15

Caroline Witek  

What is the claim?

1. What is the main point the writer is trying to make?

The writer's main point is about the importance of planned parenthood. And on how she agrees with it.

2. Is there a clearly stated THESIS, or is it merely implied? Where do you see this?

Yes there is a clear stated thesis. It is at the beginning of the essay in her introduction. “The fact is, the heart of this ideological debate on abortion doesn’t matter as much as preserving the many other health care services this organization provides to women.”

What support does the writer offer for the claim?

3. What reasons are given to support the claim?

The reasons that are given to support the claim are strong. The author says that the decision to have an abortion is a personal decision. She talks about the organization and its beneficial things not only about abortion itself but sexual education and more. The chances to have a woman’s entire life changed. A testimony from a family member who has experienced with Planned Parenthood.

4. What evidence backs up those reasons? Facts? Statistics? Testimonials by authorities? Examples? Pertinent anecdotes?

The evidence that she uses to backup her reason are facts, statistics and testimonies.

5. Are the reasons plausible and sufficient?

Yes the reasons are plausible because she uses many evidence from good resources.

How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?

6. Is there any mention of counterarguments? If so, how does the writer deal with them?

Yes the counter arguments the author chose are shown by telling people's reaction when a video was released of a fetus being aborted. Many people are also against abortion.

7. By refuting them? By acknowledging them and responding to them reasonably?

She backed it up by saying that the video was not real. And that what appeared to be an aborted fetus was actually taken off from the internet.

8. Does the writer treat other arguments respectfully? dismissively?

Yes the author treats the other argument respectfully.

9. Are his or her own arguments appropriately qualified?

Yes her arguments are appropriately qualified.

What authorities or source of outside information does the write use?

10. How is each one used?

The author uses CNN, LA times. LA Times was used on her essay to give statistics about how much the organization has helped. CNN was used to more statistics.

11. How credible is each? Are they in any way biased or otherwise unreliable?

The outside resources are very helpful and trustworthy.

12. Are they current?

Yes it is current.

How does the writer address you as the reader?

13. Does the writer assume that reader know something about what is being discussed?

No the author does not assume I know about Planned Parenthood. So she helped explain what Planned Parenthood is, its beneficial things, how many people are against it and the reasons why.

14. Does his or her language include you or exclude you?

It includes me.

15. Do you sense that you and the author share any beliefs or attitudes? Which ones and how so?

Yes, because she tells the importance of Planned Parenthood. I agree that during high school we tend to not pay much attention about sex education and improving in this can help. Planned Parenthood has helped improve sex education.  

Patrick Kulfan

What is the claim?

16. What is the main point the writer is trying to make?

The authors main point is about how killer games do not make children want to kill.

17. Is there a clearly stated THESIS, or is it merely implied? Where do you see this?

yes is it clear it is at the beginning of his introduction.

What support does the writer offer for the claim?

18. What reasons are given to support the claim?

Violence relation between gun violence and game purchase.

19. What evidence backs up those reasons? Facts? Statistics? Testimonials by authorities? Examples? Pertinent anecdotes?

Graphs and statistics and testimonies.

20. Are the reasons plausible and sufficient?

Yes

How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?

21. Is there any mention of counterarguments? If so, how does the writer deal with them?

Yes there are he talks about violence, negative impact, school shooting, teen behavior, bad grades. By using testimonies, and graphs.

22. By refuting them? By acknowledging them and responding to them reasonably?

He answered them reasonably.

23. Does the writer treat other arguments respectfully? dismissively?

With respect

24. Are his or her own arguments appropriately qualified?

          Yes

What authorities or source of outside information does the write use?

25. How is each one used?

BBC News by people's experience.

26. How credible is each? Are they in any way biased or otherwise unreliable?

Did a good job in choosing his resources.

27. Are they current?

Yes

How does the writer address you as the reader?

28. Does the writer assume that reader know something about what is being discussed?

No he explains it.

29. Does his or her language include you or exclude you?

Include me

30. Do you sense that you and the author share any beliefs or attitudes? Which ones and how so?

Yes I agree that some games are helpful for learning. And do not fully agree that games that have shooting does not do crime. Sense there are young children who play games.  

In Class Collaboration

In Class Collab. Spriggs Essay vs Short Articles

• take a position early, explain your position
• explain your topic’s relevance to the average reader’s real life
• present a few reasons, support your reasons with facts
• identify another point of view and respond to it
• identify real world applications/repercussions of your position
• explain important terms/ideas relevant to your topic, pictures can help
• personal experience is a powerful way to establish credibility
• providing background information also establishes authority over your subject
• use of statistics can be very convincing
• discrediting of opposing sides done carefully is good
• use of emotional persuasion is very dependant upon subject and audience
• author should be aware of pathos/logos/ethos and which will be most persuasive for their topic

Katherine Spriggs questions 1-4 on p100

1) It's clear that this is a topic that matters to Katherine Spriggs. Has she convinced you that this matters- and if so, how? How does Spriggs establish the importance of her topic?
I think that her topic is important. At first I wasn't aware of how much we can do to change decrease global warming and one of those are by buying local.

2) What counterarguments or positions other than her own does Spriggs consider- and how does she respond in each case? She says that the third world my be affected by this and replies by saying "exploiting manual labor in the third world would only be temporary solution because we will be industrializing.

3) Choose a section of Spriggs' essay that you find especially effective or ineffective. Referring to the genre features discussed on p.66, describe what makes this part of her argument persuasive- or not.
One part that she used to persuade me was "the United States is especially guilty of contributing to the problem, producing about  a quarter of all global green house gas emissions, ans playing a large part in pollution and shrinking world oil supplies as well."

4) Spriggs include several photos in her essay. How do they contribute to her argument?
She has photos of farming, crops and truck transportation which are some of the things she talks about in her essay.She says trucking is expensive financially and farming is eco friendly. Sort of like saying this vs. that. Trucking vs. farming.

Analyze p80

Analyzing a short piece of writing on pg 80

          The essay made by Katherine Spriggs was made to persuade Americans in buying local foods. She sticks to her opinion and does her research of the many ways buying local can help America and the environment.

Some of the characteristic features she used:

• "Explicit Position"- she fully explained herself about the importance of local buying. 
• "A response to what others have said or done"-  Katherine uses this characteristic feature in her writing as shown on p 96 and 97 when she says, "Some argue that buying local can actually have a negative environment effects" such as, "it would be more wasteful to try to grow pineapples in the Northeast than to have them shipped from the Caribbeans." She responds back by agreeing with the person and than says that if we were to buy local we would have to buy as mush as we can of it.  
• "Appropriate background information" - She uses multiple good resources such as "Global Warming Statistics, CNN article, and farmer experiences. 
• "A clear indication of why the topic matters" - on pg 92 she gives the main reason why we should buy local. Some of the the things she mentioned were how agriculture effects global warming. Adding to this she says that "scientists estimate that in the year 2030, there will be no glaciers left in Glacier National Park" used this strategy to alert us. 
• "Good reasons and evidence" - the good reasons are products being shipped long distance which becomes to be costly. 
• "Attention to more than one point of view"- she uses the example of hiring immigrant labor, food transportation, farming, environment and more. 
• "Authoritative tone"- Katherine spoke in a well formal tone. She seemed to be familiar with farming and how product shipping interacts with global warming. 
• "An appeal to readers' values" - At the end of her essay there were some concerns I had about local buying which she mentioned, these were how the third world will be affected? Pricing of food? Any changes in personal lifestyle?  

  

Video Group Response

11/12 Video Group Response

·         Overwhelming use of pathos

·         Use of fear, making us scared of what could happen

·         Sad background music the whole time

·         Police officer’s graphic descriptions meant to be disturbing

·         Playing on sympathy

·         Family members feeling guilt, sister talking about sending the text that ended a life

·          Give background information about the characters, create an attachment to the people who died

·         Showing brain damage guy with his doctor, having him trying to talk  about it to invoke sympathy

·         No logos used, no statistics or logic

·         No ethos, never take the position that the good thing to do is to not text and drive

·         Never directly state their message, their message is clear and important enough that it doesn’t need to be said

·         showing one person at a time, crying is more personal and emotional than many people together

·         emphasis on the “last text” showing the message they were sending/looking at when they crashed

·         message is that one text > your life

·         policeman “it never gets easier”